Toady for this week for writing we had to finish our writing dlo because it will be good to show all people about our learning at Panmure Bridge School. My partner was Joshua and we made a dlo about pechaflikr, pechaflilkr is something you make out of an story that tells someone what is the story about then we moved on to our link ideas between paragraphs what we had to do is link our comments of what the story is gonna be about so Joshua and i put our information and powerful words on to the link ideas between paragraphs then we paint a picture with words to show not tell what was happening. this was an good activity with my partner so we can do this an another time and the hard bit was trying to add more powerful words. |
This blog is a record of my learning from Panmure Bridge School in Auckland, NZ through to Tamaki College.
Tuesday, 14 August 2018
Pechaflikr Narratives
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Hi Dallas and Joshua W, I really enjoyed reading your writing.'We decide to play a restricted game called Ouija board'I liked this sentence because you used the word restricted to talk about the game you were playing. I was wondering why you chose to use the Ouija board?
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DeleteThis is the amazing work. My favorite part of this story is paragraph 3 which is 'As I saw my friend arriving at my house I sprinted to the front door to let them in. I was surprise they really came' because I can imagine how it feels and how excited you are. Keep up your great work!
ReplyDeleteWhat a spectacular Job you have done here Dallas and Joshua. My favorite part of the writing is Paragraph 1 and 2. Because they both link to each other. And i also like your interesting words you have added to make your story sound fascinating. Keep up the good Work Dallas.
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ReplyDeleteHi Dallas and Joshua, My favourtive part of the story is paragraph 5 because I like how you said "but before we all, were about to leave I made everyone something to eat". I also like how you describe how your heart was racing when you played the oujia board game.
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ReplyDeleteHey Dallas, I really like your writing.My favorite part was'we decided to play a restricted game called Ouija board' I liked this part because you introduced us to the game.What did you enjoy about doing this activity?
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DeleteGreat job Dallas and Joshua. I really enjoyed reading you pechaflikr. My favorite part was 'There was also a huge dark spooky forest they had to come through' because it made me imagine it.
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